2125. Shoes

It wasn’t at all a pleasant experience, as you, Dear Reader, are about to find out. Janice had had a lovely afternoon. It was her birthday, and her friend, Bridget, had popped around for a natter and a cup of tea. The visit lasted a lot longer than intended, and several cups of tea were produced over the afternoon.

They chatted about all sorts of things, but mainly (would you believe) about shoes. The topic was prompted by Bridget’s brand new shoes. They were quite ordinary, but nice enough. Bridget was still “breaking them in”. She had a little blister on her left heel, despite the shoes having been advertised as “comfortable”. Of course they talked about other things, but shoes seemed to be the main theme threading the conversation.

Eventually Bridget left, and Janice sat down to watch television.

About an hour later there was a knock at the door. Janice answered. There stood a man, tall and skinny, with a mask covering his face. He didn’t look nice. Suddenly, from behind his back he produced something; Bridget’s shoes.

“You might want these,” he said, and dropped them at Janice’s feet.

He sauntered off. He disappeared.

(This story was inspired by a story by Iseult Murphy).

18 thoughts on “2125. Shoes

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  2. umashankar

    Your evolution as a flash crime writer has been exemplary. What is remarkable in your stories is the richness of detail of quotidian matters of life before a sudden twist takes the breath away. The climax is a bomb. I loved it for how it seeks to report the crime by the sheer force of description of the perpetrator, and how it produces a fertile ground for further forays. How did he know what the ladies were discussing the entire afternoon? Why did he bring the pair of shoes worn by the victim to her friends?

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    1. Bruce Goodman Post author

      Thank you Uma for such a fulsome comment. I’m not that fond of crime stories written by a number of others as I get too scared! Same for TV and movies. However, your comment is most encouraging.

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