(The opening sentence for this story was suggested by Noelle of Sayling Away. If you want to join in the fun of suggesting a future opening sentence for these stories, please leave your suggestion in the comments – only one suggestion per person!)
The sky outside the open window was dark with the portent of a storm. Philomena went over to close it. Several times in the past she had left the window open and a squall had come and blown rain on the furniture. Not much mind you. There was no substantial damage, although she kept a doily on top of the sideboard to hide a small water stain.
The window was on the ground floor. The television news had recently announced the escape of a dangerous murderer from the local prison. “Do not approach”, they had announced. “Things like that never happen to me,” thought Philomena, “but I had better err on the side of caution.”
It would be easy for a lithe man to climb in through the window. She didn’t know if the murderer was fat, thin, or somewhere in the middle. Usually in prison the inmates are fit from spending too much time in the gym with nothing better to do. The television news had not shown a photograph, so she didn’t know if the murderer was handsome, ugly, or somewhere in between. Suddenly a great rumble came from the black cloud. There was going to be a downpour.
Philomena shivered. There seemed more to it than bad weather. She had goose bumps on her arms. She almost felt a presence. “How silly,” she thought. “It must be the combination of a black sky and the news of the murderer.” A blast of lightning forked. She began to count. Thunder came five seconds later so the storm was only five miles away. At least that was the method she had learned as a girl; count the seconds, count the miles. Another lightning flash! She shut the window tight.
“Rain! Rain! Go away! Come again another day,” chanted Philomena. She turned back into the room. There was an ugly stranger standing behind her.
She probably should have shut the door, too.
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A good point!
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I wonder if the prison door wasn’t locked too. Or may be he escaped through the gym.
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We shall never know!
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Philomena means a friend of strength. Happily strength was close by.
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Thank goodness Strength wasn’t holding his knife but simply wanted a cup of sugar.
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I bet he was fat too! (BTW, my opening line suggestion was supposed to be the one about marrying Prince Harry for the money that I plagiarized from you a few days ago.)
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The story lives up to the promise of the opening sentence. The build up to the conclusion is chewy and full of texture with a hint of smoke emanating from an old, fungus laden barrel. I can only imagine the end bit not the movement to it, as proclivities of the antagonist have not been supplied. And therefore, I can only hazard a guess: perhaps he excels in flaying women alive, and he is also an accomplished taxidermist?
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Hee hee! Yes – he should have had more proclivities!
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GREAT take on my opener. I love the direction you took! Somehow I knew poor Philomena was not going to have a good end!
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I thought Philomena was perfect for the window!
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Ooh, somehow I wasn’t expecting that, this gave me goosebumps!
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You read too much fiction to get goosebumps!
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