(The form selected for this week is an adaptation of the Vietnamese Luc bat. It is an adaptation of the poetic form because Vietnamese is a tonal language and it cannot be imitated in English. The syllable count and the rhyming pattern have been adhered to!)
Let me make one thing clear:
it’s not been a good year for flies.
It’s cold and each fly dies
before they can lay shit-pies and eggs
upside-down with their legs
stuck to the ceiling, pegged up there.
I’ve a good mind to swot
at the several I’ve got, but oh!
I think I’ll let them go;
fly free, you flies, but know one thing:
to pet cat food don’t bring
an egg to make a single maggot.
To hear the poem read aloud click HERE.
Flies are so gross, and you captured that perfectly!
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I believe they’re attracted to bears!
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Ugh–it figures! 🙂
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That is a rather bizarre choice for a subject but there is something about the beauty of the format of ‘Luc bat’ rendered in such perfection that makes it rather wistful.
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I agree. I think it’s like the ghazal – it’s completely flexible yet brings a deeper element.
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The implied threat at the end is priceless. Jackie, of course, never lets a fly past without a swat.
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😀
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